In recent years some countries have experienced very rapid economic development. This has resulted in much higher standards of living in urban areas but not in the countryside. This situation may bring some problems for the country as a whole. what are these problems? How might they be reduced?

Nowadays, rapid economic development happens in many countries. The reason is the standards of living in urban
areas
are higher than in the suburbs. It causes some problems, so it should be addressed. Several ways to solve
this
problem are
provision
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of
jobs
and equal distribution of
facilities
. One of the problems is caused by not equal economic development between urban
areas
and suburbs as productive people migrate from rural to city. It happens because of the lack of
facilities
in rural
areas
,
such
as
education
service
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services
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and health care. The other reason is there are few
jobs
in formal sectors. Many rural
areas
provide informal sectors, like farming or livestock.
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people have little interest in these fields
,
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because the income is smaller than
formal
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in formal
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sectors.
Therefore
, they are more interested in the formal sector, like working in an office
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an architect or engineer. The
ways
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to solve
this
situation
is
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providing
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better
facilities
in rural
areas
,
such
as universities in
education
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fields and great hospitals in the healthcare fields. Another way is providing formal
jobs
in rural
areas
by making an industrial
factory
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factories
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or offices in
this area
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these areas
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.
Furthermore
, the government needs to provide an
education
center
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improving
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young
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generation
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knowledge about farming, livestock, or other skills involving natural resources. By joining these
education
services, the younger generation can increase their knowledge and interest
about
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in
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the
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informal sector
jobs
.
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this
several
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ways, it will bring
a better conditions
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better conditions
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and equalization of
facilities
. In the future, there are no
facilities
or
economics
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economic
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gap
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gaps
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between rural and urban
areas
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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