Your town council has decided to demolish historic building due to lack of funds to renovate. Write a letter to your council man. In your letter, you should say: ● why it is important to preserve historic building ● how the funds could be generated.

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Dear Sir My name is Peter. I'm a resident of Nui Thanh town.

Last

week, I heard the council had intended to destroy the historic building

as a result

of a lack of funds to rebuild. I'm writing to let you know and hope considers

this

building. I would like to give you something is important underneath

this

building.

Firstly

, The building was built in 1965 when Americans were invasive and the local

people

reminded the military to fall down in

this

due to

fighting with the American army.

Secondly

, It will be commercialised and attracted foreigners.

Thus

, It will generate cash flows for local

people

, especially in the Council. If we lose

this

building, we will be faced a great loss

as a result

of losing opportunities to make jobs for

people

. Relying on your email, I would like to know how to have funds to renovate. If the council don't have the budget to rebuild it. I would like to inform

people

who donate to a fund. I'm expecting your consideration as I mentioned. I was hoping and looking forward to hearing from you. If you have some questions, please feel free to reach out to me. Thanks and regards Vy

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Grammar mistakes
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

203 words

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Your town council has decided to demolish historic building due to lack of funds to renovate. Write a letter to your council man. In your letter, you should say: ● why it is important to preserve historic building ● how the funds could be generated.

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