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some people prefer to shop for food in supermarkets. Other people prefer todo their food shopping online. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #shop #food #supermarkets #todo
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a
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different choices on where we ought to buy foodstuff.some individuals prefer to shop at supermarkets and others want to buy at e-commerce.I personally believe both are good for purchasing
food
 items . On the one hand,some
people
 these days want to buy products online.Because the fact that online shops provide a platform where we can purchase
food
 items with a single click without going outside in busy traffic.
thus
,it is very suitable for
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individual who does not have
time
 to went
supermarket
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the supermarket
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 or any groceries store.To exemplify,many of the employers working in the corporate sector in big cities mostly prefer to buy
food
 online
due to
lack
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 of
time
 they have.
Moreover
,shopping for
food
 on the website not only offers convenience but
also
 introduces great offers on different banks' credit cards.
On the other hand
,why
a
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large number of
people
 over-reliant on grocery stores to get
food
 items
.
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The reason for
this
 is that sometimes the quality of vegetables and fruits was not up to the mark.As a ,result most
people
 want quality foods which are easily available in nearby supermarkets.
Besides
 ,that some
people
 have enough
time
 after completion of their work and they want to spend
time
 with their family and
therefore
 they visit mart with family to enjoy shopping.
Furthermore
, by visiting varieties of shopping
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marts
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mart
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,mart
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 we get good knowledge
on
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of
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 the different
food
 products. In conclusion,Both have their advantage and disadvantage and
people
 should choose the best place to buy
food
according to
 their needs.
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