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Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones. Why is this the case? Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

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In
contemporary
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 era of technology and development, the use of smartphones has seen an increasing trend. The limited entertainment opportunities and lack of physical activities are the major factors that caused
this
 tremendous growth.
While
 it has some advantages
on
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 the contrary, I am of the opinion that it is
a
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not a positive development. The most conspicuous reason
of
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 the massive growth in smartphone usage is the technological advancement which has improved the features
in
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 mobile phones. Communication through social media applications
as well as
 the gaming interface
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 two perfect epitomes of
this
.
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family time has been affected by the current materialism race prevailing throughout the globe.
That is
 why children do not get the required attention and time from parents and
hence
 they make use of
the
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smart phones
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 to utilise their time.
This
 development has
been
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negative effects that can cause an ire pairable damage to the children.
Firstly
, physical and mental health can be affected badly
due to
 excessive use of phones and research at
university
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 of Sydney (2022) proves that eye diseases, depression and other ailments are caused by
overuse
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 of handheld devices.
Furthermore
, digital relationships and social
application
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applications
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 have discouraged
face to face
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 social life and gatherings
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 can be an alarming sign
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 declining moral and ethical values. To recapitulate, advancement in information and technology has led to dependence on
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smartphones which is becoming an insurmountable problem for our children to focus on their studies and enjoy a healthy life.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • smartphones
  • usage
  • technology
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • entertainment
  • gaming
  • social media
  • communication
  • educational resources
  • addiction
  • dependence
  • negative effects
  • physical health
  • mental health
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