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Nowadays more people are living by themselves. What are the reasons for this? Will this have a negative or a positive impact on the society?

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Life
 is
beatiful
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beautiful
 when is decorated by a tight-knit family. But unfortunately, nowadays, many people believe that living alone is more beneficial rather than
a
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family
life
. There are several reasons behind
this
 trend and I will discuss the negative effects of
this
 in the following
paragaraphs
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paragraphs
. First of all, in
this
 modern era, many youngsters think that
the
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money is
pivotal
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 than any other
things
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 in their
life
.
Therefore
, they give more
concern
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on
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 earning wealth and properties.
Further
, they believe that getting into
a
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family
life
 will cause unnecessary expenses. Some people think that having children will ruin their freedom and enjoyment. In some cultures, people have
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trust
on
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 horoscopes and myths which prevent them to marry and they live alone.
However
, in reality, living with
spouse
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 and children lead to a peaceful
life
 and lead to cause a lot of positive impact on
the
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society as well. Those who
living
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themselve
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themselves
 will not find a proper caregiver when they fall sick or
getting
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 old. They will be neglected. If men and women live alone causing a lot of depression. The population will reduce.
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