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Inventors are not as important to society as doctors. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

#inventors #society #doctors
These days, every occupation is very vital and each of them has a different purpose.
However
, many individuals express the opinion that
doctors
 are more necessary for human life than
inventors
. It’s probably true but each career has a special role and they are essential equally in the community, whose reasons will be discussed below.
With regard
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 to
inventors
, they have created a variety of modern equipment for
society
 to improve our lives.
For instance
, Alexander Graham Bell invented the telephone and thanks to that people can communicate with others from a distance. It may be argued that to research and invent something takes a lot of time and money so we can use that money for other things like education or healthcare. Even so, thanks to the
inventors
, one of the great inventions of medicine
were
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 born, which is the blood pressure monitor, it is very convenient to help patients check their health at home without going to the hospital. In brief,
inventors
 are vital and indispensable in modern
society
.
On the other hand
,
doctors
 have a very important duty to
society
 because their role is to save patients’ lives. If there were no
doctors
, human ailments would become severe because they are not treated in time. A perfectly good illustration is that in the Covid-19 pandemic, because of the hard work and dedication of
doctors
, Vietnam has become among the countries with the lowest number of deaths in the world.
Hence
, being a doctor is a noble and
honorable
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 profession.
To sum up
, all professions are important and so are
doctors
 and
inventors
.
Doctors
 help people have good health and
inventors
 bring modern devices for them to improve their lives.
Therefore
, we need to be grateful and help them to make our
society
 more prosperous.
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