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To be labelled a ‘Work of Art’, a painting, sculpture or other art form should display certain qualities that are unique. However, over the past century there has been a decline in the quality of prize-winning artwork and it is now possible for quite ordinary pieces of art to be labelled ‘masterpieces ’ while true work of art pass unnoticed. Do you agree or disagree?

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When we hear of '
Work
 of
art
' our mind goes
immediatly
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immediately
 to great masterpieces like
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one
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 of Michelangelo, Leonardo, Picasso ecc, those pieces had always
unique
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had unique
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 qualities, and their value
nowdays
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 is
unreacheble
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unreachable
, but with
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time
this
 has changed, in the modern
art
 it seems that the idea is more important
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 the content. We can find
mocolour
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colour
 paintings,
geometrical
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 sculptures as masterpieces with
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monumental value,
this
 is kind of shocking comparing the old
art
 school to the new one, but
everthing
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everything
 evolves and we have to consider that we are living in the internet and social media era,
this
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 the way the artist
relate
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 to their
work
. I honestly
belive
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believe
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 that
art
 is
art
, there is
not
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no
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 ordinary pieces or true
work
 of
art
, there are different ideas and different ways to say
somthing
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something
 doing
art
, and every artist use their tools to make their
work
 unique and personal. I
also
 think
that is
 important always to take
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 consideration how much
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art
 has changed since the first humans were paintings in
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caves until now, that
help
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 us understand why
the
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modern
art
 is so different, and the
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reason
 is because
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humanity and the way the people live and think is simply changed and
art
 changed with it.
To conclude
 what I personally don't like is that there is
division
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 between 'masterpieces' and ordinary pieces of
art
while
 all of them would have to be
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 as an
espression
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expression
 of
a
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thought, like a magnificent on
this
 world, a way to filter what we see and what we could see.
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