The pie chart illustrates several types of careers that Anthropology students did after they graduated from a university while. Tthe table gives the information about their salaries following five years of working in their own field.

The pie chart illustrates several types of careers that Anthropology students did after they graduated from a university while. Tthe table gives the information about their salaries following five years of working in their own field.
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The diagram demonstrates the various steps involved in the production of orange
juice
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, which commences with the gathering of fresh oranges and culminates in the distribution of packaged
juice
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to retail stores.
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with, freshly picked oranges are gathered and transported on trucks to a processing plant, where they undergo a thorough washing process using a machine. After that, a squeezing machine is employed to extract
juice
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from the oranges, and the leftover solid waste comprising
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seeds and peels is collected and utilized for animal feed. The squeezed
juice
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can
then
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be packaged and sent to supermarkets, or sent to a different facility for an evaporation process. In the evaporation process, the freshly squeezed orange
juice
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is processed by an evaporator machine, which eliminates the water content. The concentrated
juice
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is
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canned, moved to a warehouse, and later combined with water.
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, it is packaged and distributed to supermarkets, where it is available for purchase.
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