The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at west park secondary school since its construction in 1950

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The following map represents the data about the differences in the West Park Secondary department building in 3 non-identical periods between time 1950,1980 and 2010.

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, it is not surprising that only the Main road has remained untouched by time,

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the other structures were affected by the changes. The biggest distinction that can be noticed is the fact that in the past there were residential buildings near the faculty,

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the institution territory itself was relatively smaller than it will be in the future.By the way, in 1950 years the place of the modern sports field was occupied by farmland.

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the diagrams, in 1980 was added other stuff to the academy territory which is a car garden, sports field and science block. As is noticeable the car estate and science block was built on the site of the old houses,

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in 2010 the hall building remained unchanged, but the parking space was increased, which led to a decrease in playground and sports field spots.

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, during the whole time, West Park Secondary seminary was exposed to a lot of change

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