The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at west park secondary school since its construction in 1950

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The following map represents the data about the differences in the West Park Secondary department building in 3 non-identical periods between time 1950,1980 and 2010.

Overall

, it is not surprising that only the Main road has remained untouched by time,

therefore

the other structures were affected by the changes. The biggest distinction that can be noticed is the fact that in the past there were residential buildings near the faculty,

besides

the institution territory itself was relatively smaller than it will be in the future.By the way, in 1950 years the place of the modern sports field was occupied by farmland.

According to

the diagrams, in 1980 was added other stuff to the academy territory which is a car garden, sports field and science block. As is noticeable the car estate and science block was built on the site of the old houses,

However

in 2010 the hall building remained unchanged, but the parking space was increased, which led to a decrease in playground and sports field spots.

To sum up

, during the whole time, West Park Secondary seminary was exposed to a lot of change

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The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at west park secondary school since its construction in 1950

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