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The table describes the change of people who went for international travel in different areas in 19901995 2000 and 2005(In millions).Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The table describes the change of people who went for international travel in different areas in 19901995 2000 and 2005(In millions).Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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the graph compares the change in
people
 who went on international travel in six different
areas
 in 1990,1995 ,2000 and 2005. from 1990 to 1995 the
number
 of
people
 who went on international travel increased dramatically ,and in the next decade increased slowly.and the
number
 of
people
 who went to
Europe
 was highest than in
other
Correct article usage
the other
show examples
 five
areas
,and the
number
 of
people
 who went to the middle east was the lowest in 15 years.
Europe
 was the most popular area of the six
areas
,the
number
 of
people
 who went to
Europe
 increased from 280.2 to 390.3 in the first 5 years , and the
number
 of
people
 from 2000 to 2005 increased slowly to 400.2,but the figure for
people
 went to
Europe
 still higher than other
areas
.America had 80.5
million
travellers
 in 1990, and
then
 in the 5 years raise dramatically to 112.5, but from 2000 to 2005 the
number
 declined to 113.2 .the
number
 of
travellers
 in Asia and the Pacific increased steadily,from 60.2
million
 in 1990 to 135.8
million
 in 2005. the
number
 of
travellers
 in Africa and the Middle East showed almost the same trend from 9.8
million
 and 18.2
million
 in 1990 and raised to 15.8 and 28.7
million
 in 2005,much lower than
other
Change preposition
in other
show examples
areas
.
overall
, during the
15 -year
Correct your spelling
15-year
 period , the
number
 of international
travellers
 in five
areas
 all showed an upward trend.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, areas, number, europe, million, travellers with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "change" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 8 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.
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