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you recently spent a night in a hotel and had to put up with a great deal of noise very early in the morning because of a faulty central heating system. The manager promised to contact you regarding compensation but you still haven't heard from him. Write a letter to the hotel. In the letter - describe the problem at the hotel - explain what the manager had said at the time - say what you want the manager to do.

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Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing to complain about the inconvenience caused during my stay at your hotel. The Manager promised to revert to my complaint and would pay suitable
compensation
 but I haven't received anything yet. I stayed in your hotel during my vacation between 4-6 July in room number 216.
This
 room was near the central heating unit. Because of the fault in the system, it created a lot of noise and we were not able to sleep during the night. We requested to change the room but it was not addressed by the staff. During checkout, when I raised the issue with the manager, he assured me of some cut-off in our hotel bill as
compensation
.
However
, they refused to do it on the original bill and asked to send it by cheque. It's been 4 weeks now and I have not received any
compensation
 from your side. I want you to pay it as soon as possible
otherwise
, I will complain to the consumer court to get
this
 matter settled. I hope you will respond to me and pay me valid
compensation
 at the earliest. Your's Faithfully, Amarjot Kaur
Submitted by amarjot755 on

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task achievement
Although the letter addresses all parts of the task effectively, try to provide a bit more detail about the nature of the noise to make the situation clearer.
task achievement
Clarifying the steps you expect the manager to take can improve the specificity of your request.
coherence cohesion
To enhance logical structure, consider starting with a brief positive comment about the hotel to balance your complaint and make it more diplomatic.
suitable writing tone
Maintaining a slightly more formal tone, particularly in the last paragraph, can make the letter more effective.
task achievement
The letter covers all required points: description of the problem, manager's initial response, and what you want now.
coherence cohesion
The letter uses a clear, concise greeting and closing, which frames the content effectively.
coherence cohesion
Ideas are organized into separate paragraphs, each addressing a distinct part of the task.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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