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The graph and table below show the average monthly temperatures and the average number of hours of sunshine per year in three major cities. Summarize this information by selecting and reporting the main feautures and make comparison where relevant.

The graph and table below show the average monthly temperatures and the average number of hours of sunshine per year in three major cities. Summarize this information by selecting and reporting the main feautures and make comparison where relevant.
#show #temperatures #hours #sunshine #year #three #cities #information #feautures #comparison
The graph and table chart depicts, the climate and duration of
sunshine
 in the three main towns
such
 as
London
, New
York
, and
Sydney
 per year.
Overall
, yearly, the hours of
sunshine
 in New
York
 and
Sydney
 are almost similar.
London
 has
least
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the least
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 hours of
sunshine
according to
 the table chart.
While
 in the winter ,season new
york
 and
London
 show their temperatures drastically decrease during January month, as per the line graph.
To begin
 ,
with
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in
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Sydney
, Climate in January is above 25 degrees. ,
However
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,However
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Sydney
 and
London
, is showing below 10
degree
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degrees
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 in the winter season.
In addition
 to
this
 duration of
sunshine
 in
London
 falls at 1,180 hrs and New
york
 and
Sydney
 have nearly 100 hrs difference
that
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which
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 is 2,535 and 2473 respectively.
Furthermore
, the peak
of
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apply
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temperature is on month
july
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July
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 and the climate of new
york
 and
London
 comes near to 30 degrees
celcious
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celsius
.
Consequently
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,Consequently
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 the temperature
on
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in
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Sydney
on
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in
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july
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July
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will drop down to 15
degree
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degrees
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.
On
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At
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 the end of
a
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the
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 year again new
york
 and
london
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London
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 reach
belwon
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between
below
 10 and vice vasa
sydney
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Sydney
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 reach 25
degree
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degrees
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on
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in
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december
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December
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 month
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