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Some people say that supermarkets and manufacturers have a responsibility to reduce the amount of packaging on products they sell Others believe that it is the consumer's responsibility to avoid buying products which have a lot of packaging. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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some people say that
supermarkets
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 and
manufacturers
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 have a
responsibility
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 to reduce the amount of packing on
products
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 they sell ,and others believe that it is the consumer's
responsibility
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 to avoid buying
products
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 which have s
lot
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 of packaging ,I think that both sides have a
responsibility
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 to reduce the use of the amount of packaging . on the one hand ,there are some reasons for these situations
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,the main reason is that
manufacturers
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 want to make more profits because more packaging can make the
products
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 more attractive,
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, the prices of
products
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 can increase the value of the
products
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 so that more
consumers
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 can choose to buy it.
secondly
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,
consumers
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 have no awareness of environmental protection,when
consumers
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 bought
products
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 did not avoid to choose a
lot
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 of packaging
products
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 ,and only care about the attractive packaging,
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,it causes the sales are getting better and better which leads
supermarkets
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 to need to stock more goods,and
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manufacturers
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 will increase production.
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,
supermarkets
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 did not avoid a stock with
products
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 which have a
lot
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 of packaging ,giving the chance for
consumers
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 to buy a
lot
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 of packaging
products
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. on the other hand ,I think governments
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 have the
responsibility
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 to publish relative rules to restrict the manufacturer of
products
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 and can reduce using exceed packaging ,and
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 restrict for
supermarkets
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 to stock many
products
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 which have a
lot
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 of packaging.
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, government and
supermarkets
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 can organize more campaigns aimings to raise public awareness of the environmental issues of plastics,and
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 people boycott plastic packaging . in conclusion, I think
supermarkets
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 ,
manufacturers
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 and
consumers
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 all have a
responsibility
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 to reduce the amount of packaging ,and
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 ,governments should raise public awareness of the environmental issues of plastics.

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