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The rise of convenience foods has helped people keep up with the speed of the modern life style. What are the advantages of this trend? Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays, the existence of F&B industrial involve in their daily lifestyle. In many countries, with the growth of industrialization, more and more people choose to solve problems in a crash way. Fast foodstuff is one of them. In
this
 essay, I will discuss why using fast
food
 still has some good points in some aspects but why it can eventually be financially disadvantageous. The main benefit of eating convenience foods, rather than any other healthy
food
, is because of their useability.
Food
 can be done in
quick
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 time, the clients don'
t
 have to spend a long time waiting. If you are hungry,
for example
, you have to go somewhere straight away,
then
 you can buy fast
food
 and take it away. Or, for whatever reason, the F&B is always diverse and popular with many types of cuisine, so you can buy them everywhere. Clearly, fast
food
 is just used by people who live in a hustle and bustle city where they couldn'
t
 have a fine dinner. The first disadvantage of fast
food
 is known as doesn'
t
 have the provision of adequate nutrition. Everyone is aware of
this
 enormous disadvantage so they try not to abuse it as much as possible.
Moreover
, the documentary on VTV about
food
 safety is more than ever.
This
 is the red warning of awareness's consumers. If people unlucky who bought
food
 doesn'
t
 safe, it can be life-threatening.
Lastly
, if we buy convenient
food
 rapidly over a long time, we will be paid a huge amount of money which can cause financially disadvantageous. In
this
 essay, I showed that fast
food
 provides maximize its potential if we use it moderately and is counterproductive if we are too dependent
on
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. I believe that the disadvantages of
this
 trend outweigh the advantages. Personally, I always choose the best quality of
food
 for myself even though it's quite expensive but it's good for our health.
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