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The diagram below details the process of producing olive oil.

#process #oil
The process illustrates some steps to produce olive oil from ripe olives. In general, it is
easily
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 to see that there are 7 main steps, from picking olives at the first step to storing
at
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storages
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 and selling complete products at shops. In the first step, olives are collected and gathered from olive trees. After that, they are rinsed by
specialized
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machine
 with fresh water. After they are cleaned, they are put into a
smash
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machine
 to become olive seeds, which are the removed parts and olive paste. In the next step, the olive paste is placed in bags with holes and transported by
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 automatic
machine
. Afterwards, they are pressed by a pressing
machine
 to reduce maintained air before
seperating
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separating
 into 2 different types of liquid: water and oil. In the final stage, the oil which is
fully-processed
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 is
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a sale
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sale
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 at shops for customers and remained products are placed in
storages
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storage
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.
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