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Global warning is one of the most serious issues that the world is facing today. What are the causes of global warming and what Measures can governments and individuals take to tackle the issue

#world #measures #governments #individuals
Global warming is considered one of the most urgent and devastating topics that
needs
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 urgent solutions from world leaders, experts, and common
people
.
To begin
 with, throughout the years, our environmental issues have been in the spotlight.
People
 from around the world are protesting, scientists are trying to provide alternatives and every now and
then
 there are conferences to discuss
this
 issue
further
.
However
, we have not seen much difference. Having said that, in my opinion in order to find solutions we have to know the causes of
this
 dilemma.
For example
, the greenhouse effect plays a major role in global warming by producing carbon dioxide which comes mostly from cars and Is trapped in the air that surrounds the earth.
In addition
, industrial processes are producing a huge amount of waste products which have some negative side effects,
for instance
, marine pollution and land degradation. Even though the elements which directly participate
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 damaging the environment are largely being used in daily life and a lot of
people
 depend on them there
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 some
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 which may provide a solution to our problem.
Such
 as
people
 could reduce driving cars and using public transportation,
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 participate in cleaning and protecting the forests.
Nevertheless
, as much as individuals have
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 role, the governments have the biggest effect. Some
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sustainable
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 solutions that could be done, using solar and wind power,
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 the price
on
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 carbon.
To sum up
, global warming needs action from both, individuals and governments as
this
 problem  Is considered our responsibility. We have to listen to experts and scientists to find alternative resources.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • global issue
  • severity
  • urgency
  • greenhouse effect
  • human-induced
  • deforestation
  • fossil fuel combustion
  • industrial pollution
  • environmental regulations
  • emission standards
  • renewable energy sources
  • green technologies
  • international cooperation
  • Paris Agreement
  • climate change
  • energy consumption
  • public transportation
  • recycling
  • eco-friendly
  • extreme weather conditions
  • biodiversity
  • economic stability
  • collective responsibility
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