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Free electricity in the states can lead to affect the economy of the country . Do you agree or disagree.

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Free electrical
energy
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 in the states can lead to
have
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on
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 effect on the
monetry
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monetary
 device of the
nation
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. I agree with the given notion and
enlightment
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enlightenment
 is
being
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explicated in the
further
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 present content. By emphasizing
on
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the lucrative points that free
electricity
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 can
effect
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affect
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 the money of the
nation
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. On top of all,
liquidity
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the liquidity
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 of the
nation
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 is being affected by the free
electricity
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 system as
myriad
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 of things
are
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 utilised for making
the
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electricity
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that is
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 not only exorbitant but
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 in less quantity. By virtue of
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 in upcoming
time less
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timeless
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 quantity can be noticed of these products.
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, higher consumption could be noticed of electrical
energy
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 because of
free
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 facility of
electricity
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due to
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 which administration
have
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 to climb the ratio of the tax and in
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 upcoming generation of
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nation
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a nation
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 can face ample
of
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impediments in their life .
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, people do not give
their
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preference to
what
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saving
the
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electrical
energy
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. Turning to the significant views that in
the
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every
nation
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 liquidity can be affected by the electrical
energy
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. Illegal activities can be observed in the country as ample
of
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factors are included
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that
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 need
in
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electricity
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 ,illegal mining selling and
electricity
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 to
the
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another
nation
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 that can
that can
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directly lead to
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unprecedented
issue
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to
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 the country.
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,people can perform gathering mental activities with their systems of free cash.
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, rising demand is being noticed
of
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electricity
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fan
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, bulbs and many more other things because mankind can you lies in high amount. In the fact of
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 people have to
utilised
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 more money that can become the cause of lack of products. In conclusion ,
electricity
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 in the
nation
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 can lead to
decrease
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the
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 economy of states as the ratio of products can
be incline
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, inflation can be can
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 be increased in the
nation
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 .
in addition
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,
upcoming
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 generation can face ample
of
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problems for staying
good
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a good
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life style
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lifestyle
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.

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