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Increasing numbers of students are going to university instead of working after high school. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who do this.

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In recent years, many students tend to join a university learning upon completing their high school studies rather than doing jobs.
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 the essay will argue the benefits of
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 change to obtaining higher literacy and raising the nation's economy, with some drawbacks to spending a lot of money and
labour
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 shortage.
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 with advantages, the most pressing one is getting a job in a high-profile profession
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 as Engineering, Technology, or science.
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, the student can broaden their minds and obtain high wages to live a lavish life.
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,
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 movement can huge impact on the country's economy by working with other nations which is a shortfall of these kinds of professionals.
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, a study done by the ministry of education in India showed that 25% of doctors all over the world are Indian.
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, university culture is not only beneficial for an individual, but
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 for the country's economy. Shifting toward the disadvantages, higher education institution costs a very high amount of money. Parents could have to suffer a financial crisis to educate their children in universities.
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, if all the people get higher education, there will be a shortage of
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 to do small-scale jobs because well-qualified people tend to resent these kinds of work.
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, many countries are facing
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 shortages these days because of
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 trend. They bring
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 from under-developing nations.
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, there could be a lack of
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 for small-scale jobs in the coming years if
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 trend will continue. In conclusion,
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 studying at universities can be helpful for the people and nation by receiving high salaries and growing the country's GDP respectively, some drawbacks could not be ignored
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 as the high expenses of study and the shortage of
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 continuing
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 trend.
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