The charts below show the change in ownerships of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in housholds in oun country between 1920 to 2019.
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illustrates
the percentages of Change the verb form
illustrate
houshold
with electrical Correct your spelling
household
households
gatgets
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gadgets
number
of hours of Correct article usage
the number
houswork
per week in Correct your spelling
housework
houshold
from 1920 to 2019.
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household
households
Overall
, the percentage of applicance
that has Correct your spelling
applicants
appliance
changes
the most is refrigerator Change the verb form
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follow
by Wrong verb form
followed
vacuum
cleaner. These Add an article
a vacuum
the vacuum
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households
housholds
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households experience
experice
a remarkable increase meanwhile the
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experience
proportion
of washing machine has steady constant. Add an article
the proportion
However
, in this
country, the tendency of the time spent in
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on
houswork
in a week has declined over the period of time.
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housework
to
the line chart, the percentage of refrigerator Remove the preposition
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usages
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usage
incresed
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increased
neary
0% at the beginning to 90% in 1960 Correct your spelling
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then
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was steady
steady
constant at 100% Change the word
steadily
in
1980 up to the end of the period.
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from
As well as
the proportion of vacuum cleaner owners that has a dramatical growth from 30% at the initial to 100% in 2000. On the contrary
, the volume of washing machine
experienced the least Fix the agreement mistake
machines
flutuation
, it Correct your spelling
fluctuation
slighly
rose from 40% in 1920 to 70% in 1960 and Correct your spelling
slightly
staeadily
went Correct your spelling
steadily
uo
to approximately 75% in 2019.
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up
Nonetheless
, the amount of time for housework in a week considerably declined from 50% in 1920 to 20% in 1960 and continue gradually dropped
until reached the bottom Wrong verb form
dropping
around
10% in 2019.Change preposition
of around
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