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he average standard of people's health is likely to be lower in the future than it is now. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#people #health #future
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Some
people
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 assert that the average standard of
people
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's
health
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 tends to be worse than it is now.
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 there any
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 to
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 belief? There are two reasons to support
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 idea:
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,
people
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 have been eating an unhealthy diet and
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, the resource of
food
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 in the world will be limited so that
people
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 cannot gain enough nutrition.
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people
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 constantly have unhealthy dishes which have an adverse impact on their
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. These can include junk
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 as french fries, hamburgers and instant nuddles. By way of an example, young
people
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 eat a variety of unhealthy
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 rather than healthy
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 since they have financial issues.
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 an article in the Asahi Shimbun newspaper published
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 month, eight out of ten Japanese university students have junk
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 at least twice a week because
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food
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 is relatively inexpensive.
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, their
health
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 condition is becoming worse.
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, a shortage of
food
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 may occur making
people
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 cannot obtain nutrition as the population in the world is dramatically increasing. In fact, the research recently conducted by The University of Tokyo discovered that
people
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 will not be able to obtain enough
food
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 in 50 years. If
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 unwanted situation will happen in the future, many
people
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 may suffer
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 issues.
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, The government of Japan focuses on finding out a solution to avoid the problem. In conclusion, we cannot deny that the
health
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 condition of
people
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 will be lower
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 the fact of their diet routine and the possibility of
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 shortage which might happen in the near future. We must urgently consider solutions to keep
people
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 healthy.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • 1. Standard of health
  • 2. Average
  • 3. Lower
  • 4. Future
  • 5. Aging population
  • 6. Chronic diseases
  • 7. Sedentary lifestyle
  • 8. Lack of exercise
  • 9. Poor dietary habits
  • 10. Environmental pollution
  • 11. Technological advancements
  • 12. Impact on health
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