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Cooperation rather than competition should be encouraged among high school students. In about 200-250 words, write an essay to express your opinion on the proposal. Use reasons and examples to support your position.

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, to the nature of our
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waste
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environment
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, if
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for example
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government
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 citizens begin to recycle. more, the end result was fascinating because
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 of
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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  • educators
  • collaborative skills
  • individual achievement
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