In order for the world to be a 'greener' place, punishments and fines for environmentally unfriendly acts committed by individuals need to be more severe. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

As human

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being

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everyone should be responsible to protect the ecosystem and

this

green, non-polluted environment

gradually

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reduced

due to

humans' unpleasant events.

This

is said that the

punishments

and money for illegal activities should be more strict and harsh to punish people who harm the environment. I completely agree with the statement, because natural

resources

diminish significantly and little punishes and

fines

help to speed up the damage rate.

Firstly

, in

this

contemporary

era

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the number of natural

resources

is decreasing drastically.

According to

the growing population requirement amount

of

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lands

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land

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and

shelter

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rapidly rise and deforestation has

also

chronologically grown.

Additionally

, consume water percentage is 0.1% and most living beings are unable to use the huge amounts of marine aqua.

Although

industrialization is polluting pure water continuously, it is available in minimum amounts.

Such

as, many

researches

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revealed that polluted water contains

a considerable levels

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of mercury and it is

direct

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affects humans and animals.

Therefore

, valuable limited

resources

should be protected by punishing responsible individuals in the proper manner.

Secondly

, the available

punishments

are not adequate to control the situation. There are many rules,regulations and

fines

provided by environmental protection organizations,

however

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those are not standard and not activated practically.

Furthermore

, individuals do not care about insufficient

fines

and the political impacts protect them unfairly. As an example, illegal cement factory owners get permission from politicians to produce even if emitting poisonous gasses into the atmosphere.

Thus

, all

fines

and

punishments

should be harsh and powerful. In conclusion, Global green cover should protect and people who damage the ecosystem must be punished with severe

punishments

. I totally agree with the harsh

punishments

, because limited natural

resources

are diminishing permanently and available

fines

are inadequate to control the situation.