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The table below shows the percentage use of four different fuel types to generate electricity in five Asian countries in 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The table below shows the percentage use of four different fuel types to generate electricity in five Asian countries in 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The table indicates how the proportion of four different
energy
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sources
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 was used in
electricity
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generation
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 in five Asian countries in 2005.
Overall
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, Malaysia and Singapore highly depended on fossil fuels to produce
energy
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. Regarding nuclear
power
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, a major amount of
energy
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generation
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 from japan depended on it.
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Coal and lignite were the main
sources
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 to generate
electricity
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 used by Malaysia with the highest recorded value of 61%,
as well as
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 Singapore used 42% of it ranked in second place.
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, there were 39% of other
energy
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sources
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 that used in Singapore.
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it is particularly noticeable that Thailand was the only country to deeply develop petroleum products in
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 record with 36% of
electricity
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 generated from it. They
also
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 used 42% of other
energy
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 in their
power
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 network. Nuclear
power
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 was chosen to be a main part of
electricity
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generation
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 in Japan with the highest figure 49%. As for South Korea,
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 they put 33% of their
power
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sources
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 from nuclear, hydro and wind dominated their
electricity
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generation
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 with 48%.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, sources, electricity, generation, power with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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