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Influence of human beings on the world's ecosystem is leasing to the extinction of species and loss of bio-diversity. What are the primary causes of loss of biodiversity? What solutions can you suggest?

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Anthropogenic activities have caused detrimental effects on the world's ecosystem, and
this
 has been causing the massive extinction of
species
. The primary reasons aggravating the issue are
development
 activities and global warming. There is a need to conserve these
species
 using the concept of 'Sustainable
development
.'
This
 essay will highlight the primary reasons
along with
 some suitable solutions. To commence,
development
 activities
such
 as buildings and dams are destroying
forests
.
As a result
, we are disturbing the natural habitats of the earth's biodiversity.
For instance
, the Bullet train project has led to the destruction of fifteen hundred kilometres of a forest.
Furthermore
, global warming is turning ecosystems into inhabitable areas.
For example
,
this
 has led to coral reefs' bleaching which is a major environmental concern.
Similarly
, the 'Narmada dam project' led to the alienation of many
species
 from the
forests
 of Gujrat.
Hence
, we need some concrete solutions to end
this
 issue. To solve the issue, we need to work on three fronts.
Firstly
, there is a need to build protected areas for
species
,
this
 will provide the natural conditions to increase their fertility rate. To quote an example, the 'Tiger reserves' in India doubled their population within a decade.
Secondly
, the urban
forests
 will provide additional space for flora and fauna. These city
forests
 will improve the relationship between human beings and wildlife.
Thirdly
, humanity must adopt the concept of 'Sustainable
development
.'
This
 will promote the idea of sharing natural resources with other
species
 and protecting them.
To conclude
, there is severe stress on our ecosystem, and many
species
 are feeling its effects. There is a need to build environmental awareness among citizens to conserve the world's biodiversity.
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