The diagram below shows the multistage production of pears as canned fruits Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and mae comparisons with relevant.

The diagram below shows the multistage production of pears as canned fruits

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and 

mae comparisons with relevant.
The diagram illustrates how to produce canned fruit step by step.
It is clear that
there are several main steps in the
process
, from the picking of
pears
to the final canned product.
Overall
, it can be seen that
process
of canning
pears
is a complex
process
involving many steps In the first stage of the
process
, ripe
pears
are picked by hand and
then
transported to the factory where the
pears
are washed and
then
checked for quality under a magnified view.
Next,
the defective
pears
are taken away and the good ones are cooled in storage at a specific temperature.
Then
the
pears
are weighed and graded into different grades.
Following
this
, the
pears
are peeled before being sliced, and
then
their cores are removed. In the next step, these cored and sliced
pears
are put in cans and sealed before being cooked.
This
sterilized the cans filled with
pears
.
After
this
, the cans are labelled and stored and are
finally
delivered to the supermarkets for sale.
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