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Frequency of eating at fast food restaurants among people in the USA (2003-2013).

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The chart demonstrates
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 how often
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people
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 ate
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junk
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food
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 between 2003 and 2013. 4% of
people
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 in the USA consumed
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food
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 in 2003 and slightly decreases to 3% in 2006 and 2013.
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, the ratio of
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 who consume
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food
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 several times a week in America is between 20% and 15%. Respectively 17% in 2003, 20% in 2006 and 16% in 2013. In
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 consumption once a week with 33% in 2006 is higher than 31% in 2003 and 27% in 2013.
American
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people
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 who visited fast
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 restaurants once or twice a month are 30% in 2003.
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 ratio decreased by 5% in 2006 and increased again to 33% in 2013.
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, in 2006 and 2013 the habit of eating in the USA composed
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the
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proportion of 15%
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 in 2003,
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 proportion of Americans who went to restaurants a few times a year was 15%.
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, 5% of
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people
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 never ate
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food
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 in 2003
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American
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people
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 never ate
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 is 4% in 2006 and 2013.
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