The diagrams below show the life cycle of a species of larger fish called the salmon. Summariase the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show the life cycle of a species of larger fish called the salmon.

Summariase the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given diagram
illusrates
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illustrates
the life cycle of
salmon
, from their birth to return back where they were born.
Overall
,
it is clear that
the
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salmon
grows in 3 different sizes in their whole life.
In particular
, they both can swim in
river
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rivers
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and sea.
Moreover
,
salmon
species come back
where
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to where
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their life began for reproducing
purpose
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purposes
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. First of all, the adult
salmon
lay eggs
in
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at
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the bottom of
upper
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the upper
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river
, between reeds and small stones. From hatching to growing up to
‘fry’
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the ‘fry’
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stage, which
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is aproximately
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aproximately
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approximately
3 to 8
centimeters
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long, it normally takes 5-6 months. They begin moving to
lower
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the lower
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part of the
river
, where much faster water flows than
their
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in their
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home. Fries spend about 4 years
to get
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getting
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bigger to
‘smolt’
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the ‘smolt’
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stage. In
this
stage, they become 12-15
centimeters
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centimetres
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long.
Next,
smolts keep swimming
to
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into
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the open sea, and it takes normally 5 years to get there. At the ocean, they
finally
grow up as
the
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adult salmons. They are fully grown, and their size is nearly 70-76
centimeters
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centimetres
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long. The adult salmons
going
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back to their home when the
mate
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mating
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season comes. After they arrive, they lay eggs all the way up to
upper
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the upper
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parts of the
river
again.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words salmon, river with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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