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Through various social media like Facebook or Instagram, people contact each other and receive domestic and international news. Do you think advantages outweigh disadvantages?

Using social
media
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 as Facebook or Instagram for consuming global and regional
news
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 is a controversial
issues
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 which
people
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 like debating about nowadays. I would say that there are more benefits when
people
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 read
articles
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 through social
media
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. First of all, some
people
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 say that it is highly dangerous
social
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for social
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media
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 users
react
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 to
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breaking
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 right after they
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 to the public.
This
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 is
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 the fact that sometimes breaking
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 is not reliable. If the
information
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 turned out it’s from the wrong sources, it is too late to respond to make it right. Because of the characteristics of social
media
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,
information
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 spreads out in
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 a short period of time.
This
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 is a way how fake
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 is generated. Once fake
news
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 is created, it is very hard to correct
while
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 it spreads globally.
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, tons of fake
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 lead to
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harm to
entire
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 journalism system,
although
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 journalists and newspapers work hard to correct
wrong
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information
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.
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, I believe that
comsuming
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consuming
articles
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with
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 social
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helps
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 enable
people
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share
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 their opinions freely online. It allows
people
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 to exchange their opinions with
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others from different countries and cultures immediately.
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, there were a lot of
articles
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 about Asian hate crimes
in
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during
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 the Covid-19 pandemic. I read the
articles
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 on Instagram and shared posts
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 my account. After that, my Korean friends
as well as
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 international friends left comments and we had a debate. We shared our views about the crimes and it was
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 experience to embrace
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another point
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 of
views
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view
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 from my perspective.
In addition
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, if someone left wrong
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, the others corrected it with the right
information
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 with clear references. I consider my personal experience can be a positive effect of using social
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 as obtaining
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information
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 all over the world. In conclusion, there
are
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 more positive
influence
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influences
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audiences use social
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 as a
mean
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means
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 of gathering
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information
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 about what is happening in
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society. Reading
articles
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 through different online platforms makes
people
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 not only
to
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get
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knowledge from it
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 but
also
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to
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share personal thoughts with
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others from different backgrounds

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