The graph shows the percentage of UK adolescents following a vegetarian diet. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows the percentage of UK adolescents following a vegetarian diet.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
This
graph indicates the proportion of teenagers following a vegetarian
diet
in England in a period of time between 1960 and 2020. To start with the time between 1960 and 1980 which is 20
years
difference there was a massive increase in the percentage to almost 16%
adolescents
Change preposition
of adolescents
show examples
were on a vegetarian
diet
plan.
Then
, after 10
years
at
Change preposition
in
show examples
1990
Add a comma
,1990
show examples
the use of
this
diet
got decreased to 7%.
However
, it kept falling down till 1997
were
Change the verb form
was
show examples
it reached 4% and it was the lowest point between these
years
.
Otherwise
,
from
Change preposition
between
show examples
2000 and 2010 the number jumped to 11% in ten
years
.
Also
, the time between 2010 and 2020 the number was kind of stable
this
Correct pronoun usage
which
show examples
means that the number did not change from 11%. In conclusion, the year
where
Correct word choice
when
show examples
teenagers were following the vegetarian
diet
the most was
at
Change preposition
apply
show examples
1980,
while
in
Change preposition
apply
show examples
1997 it was the
least
Correct your spelling
last
show examples
year for these teens to attend the vegetarian
diet
.
Submitted by dialamustafaalwais on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words diet, years with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
What to do next:
Look at other essays: