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Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#universities #numbers #students
There is a view that the same statistic of
guy
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girl
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 should study at universities in each faculty. I partially agree with
this
 proposal since I see a couple of favourable aspects of
this
 approach.
However
, knowing that both genders have different interests and capabilities, it is impossible to have the same
figure
 of them in different
faculties
. Having the same
figure
 of male and female students is a must in terms of providing opportunities to achieve gender equality in the workplace.
In other words
, there are some
faculties
such
 as BA (Business Administration) and Management which consist of
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 who
are
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 trained to be top-level managers and even a CEO. That means that most of the managerial positions will be occupied by men.
As a consequence
, it would be hard to see
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a girl
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 as managers and it would be improbable to acquire equity among both genders. As men and women have different interests, they apply for different
faculties
 which means in some
faculties
 the
figure
 of
girl
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 may outnumber the guy considerably. Take biology faculty as an example, it is highly likely that more than half of the applicants would be
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, so it is often difficult to split up
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 and
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 into groups equally.
Therefore
, it is impractical to adopt
this
 approach. All things considered, the idea of having an equal
figure
 of
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 and mother in each classroom seems sensible, but it is slightly utopian.
Nevertheless
, the proposal can be fulfilled as long as the number of male and female candidates is equal.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender diversity
  • fostering innovation
  • educational experience
  • enforcing gender quotas
  • merit and potential
  • individual achievements
  • natural differences
  • gender equality
  • reducing gender stereotypes
  • balanced workforce
  • traditionally male-dominated or female-dominated fields
  • fluctuating applicant numbers
  • compromise on quality
  • diversity aspects
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