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Some people think that it's a good idea to socialise with work colleagues during evenings and weekends. Other people think it's important to keep working life completely seperate from social life.

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Nowadays,
people
 are tugged up with several
work
 pressures,
therefore
people
 always trying to spend their
time
 during the evening and weekends their own way, some
people
 are spending their
time
 socialising
work
 with colleagues but some
people
 are keeping their
work
 completely separate without any social
life
. In
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 I will discuss both these views and I will highlight which is the best for
people
.
However
, in my opinion,
while
 I believe, there can be a negative impact with
people
 working their
life
 without any social
life
, I agree the positive impact for
people
work
 colleagues during their free
time
 to more socialise, they can share their thoughts and they can help each one because
this
 world is very expanding for society,
therefore
 we want more and more information and support to live our
life
.
Hence
 during the evening
time
 and weekends is the best
time
 to collaborate with others.
In addition
, there are a lot of positive impacts on the economy
also
,
people
 with social
life
, spend their money to arrange parties, and social events and watch movies in movie theatres and arrange some get-togethers, and so on, those things are happening to increase the economy as well.
Secondly
, some
people
 realize that social
life
 ruined their
life
 and
time
. They always think about their future with working sperate is easy to without social encouragement, but couldn't realize that, when they felt in some problem or emergency, the social more effective. Some researchers are found that 25% of
people
 are willing migration
due to
 separate
life
 without any social encouragement. In a nutshell, my opinion is social
life
 is better than separate
life
 because the world will be a better place
hence
people
 are live together and be happier.
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