The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010.

The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010.
Given are two bar charts illustrating changes in the proportion of people , who were born in Australia and outside of it living in cities, the countryside and
towns
within a fifteen-year period from 1995 to 2010.
Overall
, what stands out from the graphs is that the percentage of people who chose
towns
and villages as a place to live has significantly declined by 2010, in stark contrast to city dwellers, whose share has increased by a quarter for both Australian origins and emigrants. Looking in more detail as regards people born in Australia,in ,
fifteen-year
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period the proportion of those who live in
towns
has dropped to less than 20% and has become equal with one of the villagers.In stark contrast to them, emigrants almost completely moved out from the countryside, where in 1995 there were two-fifths of them and by 2010 less than 10% left.
However
, the data in
towns
has not changed only slightly, still remaining under 20% for non-Australian origins.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • demographics
  • urbanization
  • migration patterns
  • population distribution
  • percentage points
  • growth rate
  • decline
  • trend analysis
  • socioeconomic factors
  • infrastructure development
  • rural exodus
  • census data
  • lifestyle changes
  • residential patterns
  • immigration policies
  • emigration
  • natural increase
  • birth rate
  • settlement patterns
  • push and pull factors
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