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Some people think that government should be held responsible when problem of homelessness snd unemployment arise.Do you agree or disagree

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 some people think that the government should be held responsible when members of
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society face the problem of unemployment and homelessness, others have a contrary view which is that every adult should own the responsibility of providing a roof over his own head and taking up apprenticeship programs or other self-empowerment training online or real-time, in order to acquire a skill when opportunities to be employed by the state isn't forthcoming.
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 both schools of thought are not completely out of place,
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 personally opine that it is the duty of the political leadership to provide employment opportunities suitable for different categories of the adult population of a given country.I hold on to
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 assertion firmly because homelessness could rarely be a challenge for one who is gainfully engaged but in the case of the occurrence of natural disasters which may result
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 the displacement from homes by victims , the government owe the community a duty of care by providing a place of abode , food and quality healthcare as they go through the process since tax remittance is a statutory obligation of the citizenry whether directly or indirectly. It is
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 worthy of mention that massive revenues are generated from natural resources found in any given community and providing employment opportunities and homes for the society is a way of extending the "goodness" of the land to the people as their constitutional rights. In conclusion, the economic strength of a community is tied to the populace in one way or another,
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 the basic need of shelter and employment should be provided by the authority and where it is lacking, the state should be held responsible for failing the federation.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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