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Compared to the past, more people are now studying abroad because it is more convenient and cheaper than before. Do you think this is beneficial to the foreign student’s home country? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

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Education
 is an essential part of human existence and progression,
hence
, the great importance
that is
 placed on its acquisition.
This
 quest for being educated can be achieved in or outside a person's
country
. With the increasing ease and lesser cost at which people acquire
education
 from foreign nations, a lot of individuals are now able to school outside their
countries
. I am of the opinion that
this
 change has more
postive
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positive
 outcomes for the student's
country
.
Firstly
, going to school abroad provides immense exposure for
the
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students. Humans are known to be diverse and unique with each territory having their own culture. Students who go to other
countries
 to
learn
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 get to see the differences in culture, economic policies, technology,
education
 and environment.
This
 may provide building blocks for new ideas or how to improve different sectors in their own
country
 .
For example
, individuals who study abroad where they enjoyed
good
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relationship
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 with their teachers are bound to apply the same habit in dealing with other people who may work with them in their home
country
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therefore
 promoting good
team work
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.
Secondly
, studying outside one's own
country
 enhances international relations. When people from different territories travel outside their
countries
 to study in another place, the
countries
 involved work towards providing a safe place and good stay for the students. An example can be seen in the relationship that European
countries
 and Africa enjoy because of the number of individuals who study in these
countries
. In conclusion, I think getting
education
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 abroad has a lot of benefits
to
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 the learner's home
country
.
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