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Popular hobbies and interest change over time and are reflection of fashion and Trends ,not indicators of what people actually want to do in their free time do you agree or disagree with this statement

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Common fun and
interest
change
subsequently
according to
 the fashion and trends in society and social media, and not
according to
 what
individuals
 really want to do in their leisure time. In
this
 case, I strongly agree with the first opinion that
people
's
interest
change
 over time
according to
 fashion and trends.
Firstly
,
this
 is because of the level of technology and information on social media that
individuals
 take into consideration when choosing a hobby, These trendy fun activities on social media make
people
change
 their interests and sometimes their lifestyles.
For example
, there is a
trend
 of a lot of
people
 going to the gym to exercise and keep fit,
this
 has made other
people
 take their health more seriously and affected the lifestyle of
individuals
 positively.
Furthermore
, the fear of missing out on the fashion in vogue influences the
interest
 of
people
. Some
people
 believe that if they do not
change
 their interests and hobbies with what is in vogue, they will miss out on the fun of the
trend
 and will not be able to meet up or they would not fit into society without joining the
trend
.
Therefore
 they try to fit themselves into what is in vogue. The aspect of mental health cannot be left out. Some persons going through a tough time at a particular phase of their life see the
trend
 as a coping mechanism, thereby making them switch their hobbies and
interest
 as a means to survive. From experience, a friend of mine who was going through depression decided to
change
 the colour of her hair on a particular day to the trending colour.
This
 was an impulse decision and it helped her to feel alive and better.
On the other hand
, if she had acted based on what she really wanted, she could have had suicidal thoughts. Taking everything into consideration, I totally agree that trends influence the rate at which
people
's interests and hobbies
change
, and it makes
individuals
 feel alive because we are all social beings.
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