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It is important for people to take risks, both in their personal lives and professional lives. Do you think the advantages of taking risk outweigh the disadvantages

#people #risks #lives #risk
Wandering on earth what makes a human
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human from an evolutionary perspective,
people
 have an ancestor who is craving for innovation. Being brave and taking the initiative lead to not only physical change in humans but
also
 psychological improvements
such
 as accepting other opinions, collaborating, and gathering. As far as I am concerned,
people
 who stick to their conditions can not grow and it poses being more biased
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 they can not self-realize themselves or their potential. Being isolated from challenging conditions deteriorates humans’ progress both internally and externally. Whatever the circumstances are
people
 who can not expand their standards or preserve the current situation most likely become a person who lacks
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capacity for emotional and physical difficulties. Taking risks means not only changing everyday appearances it is starting to do procrastinated
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 that always wanted. Anyone who is not able to enlarge their existence lessens their thoughts and
behaviors
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. Living in
a
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society to necessitates
take
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 action and
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 out
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 box referring to
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 changes.
People
 who confront
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changes
every
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 part of life embrace
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 differences and
becoming
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 more tolerant
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 everyone.
Thus
, it sustains
more
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 flexible approach holding anyone around that gives
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credit and becomes more preferred.
Furthermore
, self-actualization consists of challenges that are completed in different epochs of life, which
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 can not expose
them
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 mostly stay in the same place of their development.
Person
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 holding her/himself in
a
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 same position consistently is shaped by
what
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society’s or norm’s expectations. Being in a safe place mostly causes to
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a vicious
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 cycle, the more they are stuck in the conditions where they live, the more they lose their core. In order to find themselves taking risks or
part
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 of the action is a perennial solution for both
people
’s own desire or public health. Without challenging life,
people
 could not burgeoning new pathways for solutions,
it
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 might lead to
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 of different perspectives or feel non-autonomic. Other approaches could alleviate the anxiety of taking risks. Humankind feels depressed and alienated in the absence of various opinions and movements, so emancipated souls need a confrontation to conflict
such
 as taking initiative.
To sum up
,
people
 who stay remain wherever they are, for the sake of safety, could not meet their potential capacity and are captured by others' expectancies. That leads to them feeling insufficient for doing differently and day by day to avoid any conflict they have become more conservative
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 their own thoughts, attitudes, and behaviours. Being part of different worlds is not only good for individuals'
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 but
also
 good for
public’s
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 welfare.
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