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WRITE AN ESSAY IN WHICH YOU DISCUSS THE ADVANTAGES OF USING TECHNOLOGY IN THE BUSINESS WORLD.

#technology #business #world
The 21st century is brought a variety of changes to our lives,
for instance
,
technology
. Ultimately,
technology
 has pervaded the business sector as well. In the developing
world
,
businesses
 have been finding a way to catch up with others easily, and
also
 they desire to heat the competition. In light of
this
, day by day,
businesses
 have used
technology
 to reach their aims,
such
 as increasing marketing numbers and networks, so that they could eventually globalization all over the
world
 and make a profit from it.
Businesses
, because of what the capitalist
world
 brings, have been trying to gain power and permanently boost their income through
technology
. Using
technology
 in marketing offers lots of options
such
 as analyzing the customers and their
behivours
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behaviour
. For
businesses
 determining the target group is one of the biggest steps to globalization. Statistical methods by using
technology
 give valid and realistic numbers to
businesses
, so they could arrange their time that groups' habits, and desires, or how to manipulate them.
For instance
, a variety of social
media
 allows that permission to make commercials for the target groups for a fee. Becoming visible and reachable gives a lot of credit to
businesses
 making a gain through using
technology
.
Furthermore
, networking is one of the popular things nowadays thanks to social
media
 and
businesses
 take advantage of it as well. People from all walks of life use social
media
 to increase their followers and visibility for interaction. Business, which makes collaborating with influencers or high-profit accounts earns more, and social
media
 is one of the platforms to do
this
. Managers or someone who is the charge is mostly aware of that fact, so they have been implementing their plans
according to
 these strategies. Not only
businesses
 but
also
 influencers have been interacting with each other to increase their earnings. In conclusion,
developing
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world
 gives a lot of options
also
its
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 necessarily
expecting
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 from it back
ass
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 well.
Businesses
 need to run close the innovations for standing and competing the others.
Technology
 offers benefits for marketing and networking that
important
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 to analyze and figure out the customers, and
boos
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boost
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 the income too.
Businesses
 should follow innovations in
technology
 closely and embrace them.
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