Successfai sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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is the most well-known and lucrative sport all around the world.

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, after approximately a hundred years, it has become an industry that makes a profit from it because of brought by the capitalist system is impossible to compete with the environment,

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is one of the chain ways on the hierarchy. It has been an opportunity for sub-class citizens to escape daily life problems and stress to find themselves and create a new career.

Footballers

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who have earned more

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than

other

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professions mostly start

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job in childhood and move to middle age accepted

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someone

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others think it is an unbalanced distribution of salary, for me, it is an

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unjust conclusion of the capitalist system.

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with, the power of advertisement has emerged in every aspect of

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, which we have been exposed to through television, billboards, or even a café so which gives a credit to

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more

money

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than the other occupations and it has caused an unbalanced system of salary.

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, from its sponsor to flag, contains huge income from different areas by using psychological technics. When

people

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gather for the same purpose, it creates an inner group to dismiss the other or the unwanted, and the commercial companies or highly profitable sponsors mostly exploiting from it for taking advantage of it. In

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way,

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the companies that are attached to

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gain more power from followers, the gap between the professions has been opened. It has been serving wealth’s income not only by becoming a fan but

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by passively watching.

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,

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start their jobs when they are in the middle of their childhood and

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occupation requires removing distracting things for full concentration,

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might be one of the reasons why

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make more

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. They mostly signed a contract that includes severe conclusions if they move away.

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have to stick with those harsh rules

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almost twenty years without break.

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,

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utilizes context to release tension or stress and meeting for who believe related

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.

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who spent time with

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tend to be more relaxed and united, they ignore the

money

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that they lay on it. Fans and

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consider giving

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as investing or contributing for the

team

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's sake. Everyone who believes in

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to watch the

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and try to protect it whatever their circumstances are.

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could reach all more easily than other occupations which

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why anyone easily invests in it. In my opinion,

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could easily

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for making

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from

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,

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as other occupations that have high advertisement power and it

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the richest who are

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companies. In time, it is likely to lose its essence and

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only an industry without ethical procedures.

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,

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and their related corporations have been making

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of

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from their followers and it produces

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an unbalanced

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distribution of salary in everywhere

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the earth. Even,

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people

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who

follows

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footballs

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be feel

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more comfortable and united,

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to invest

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money

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for

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the development of the

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, it still

trade

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on its followers.