Successfai sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Football
is the most well-known and lucrative sport all around the world. Additionally
, after approximately a hundred years, it has become an industry that makes a profit from it because of brought by the capitalist system is impossible to compete with the environment, football
is one of the chain ways on the hierarchy. It has been an opportunity for sub-class citizens to escape daily life problems and stress to find themselves and create a new career. Footballers
who have earned more money
than other
professions mostly start Change preposition
in other
this
job in childhood and move to middle age accepted according to
someone while
others think it is an unbalanced distribution of salary, for me, it is an obvious
unjust conclusion of the capitalist system.
Change the word
obviously
To begin
with, the power of advertisement has emerged in every aspect of football
, which we have been exposed to through television, billboards, or even a café so which gives a credit to making
more Change the form of the verb
make
money
than the other occupations and it has caused an unbalanced system of salary. Football
, from its sponsor to flag, contains huge income from different areas by using psychological technics. When people
gather for the same purpose, it creates an inner group to dismiss the other or the unwanted, and the commercial companies or highly profitable sponsors mostly exploiting from it for taking advantage of it. In this
way, while
the companies that are attached to footballers
gain more power from followers, the gap between the professions has been opened. It has been serving wealth’s income not only by becoming a fan but also
by passively watching.
On the other hand
, footballers
start their jobs when they are in the middle of their childhood and this
occupation requires removing distracting things for full concentration, that is
might be one of the reasons why footballers
make more money
. They mostly signed a contract that includes severe conclusions if they move away. Footballers
have to stick with those harsh rules everyday
Replace the word
every day
of
almost twenty years without break. Change preposition
for
Furthermore
, football
utilizes context to release tension or stress and meeting for who believe related team
. People
who spent time with football
tend to be more relaxed and united, they ignore the money
that they lay on it. Fans and footballers
consider giving money
as investing or contributing for the team
's sake. Everyone who believes in football
to watch the team
and try to protect it whatever their circumstances are. Football
could reach all more easily than other occupations which is
why anyone easily invests in it.
In my opinion, Change the verb form
are
football
could easily used
for making Change the verb form
be used
use
money
from people
, such
as other occupations that have high advertisement power and it benefit
the richest who are Change the verb form
benefits
connect
Wrong verb form
connected
the
Change preposition
to the
football
companies. In time, it is likely to lose its essence and becoming
only an industry without ethical procedures.
Wrong verb form
become
To sum up
, footballers
and their related corporations have been making amount
of Add an article
the amount
money
from their followers and it produces unbalanced
distribution of salary in everywhere Add an article
an unbalanced
of
the earth. Even, Change preposition
on
people
who Correct word choice
though people
follows
Change the verb form
follow
footballs
might Fix the agreement mistake
football
be feel
more comfortable and united, Change the verb form
feel
tend
to invest Correct word choice
and tend
a
Remove the article
apply
money
for
the development of the Change preposition
in
team
, it still trade
on its followers.Change the verb form
trades
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