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Many people say that cooking and eating at home is better for the individual and the family than eating out in restaurants. Do you agree or disagree?

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The majority of people love to eat in
restaurants
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 rather than make
food
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 by themselves.
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 some folks believe that eating out is a part of enjoyment and fun, cooking by themselves makes it more interesting because they can choose the ingredients
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 their taste. I partly agree with
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 notion and opine that enjoying
food
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 at home with
families
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 is an excellent way to spend time with members but
dine-in
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the dine-in
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 coffee
shop
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also
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 make it cheerful. Guardians who decide to cook and eat with their
families
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 are not only strengthing their relationships within
families
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 but
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 avoiding unnecessary spicy foods which create small ailments
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 as different allergies to
food
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.
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 approach of making strong family bonds and a healthy lifestyle are key elements of happiness.
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, misunderstandings between family members require time to communicate to eliminate those. And in the same way, If an individual wants to talk with the breadwinners,
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 is a perfect time to talk about any problem they are facing.
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, cooking and eating are the best habits to remain fit and make superior relationships. Dine-in
restaurants
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 are a good idea when it comes to celebrating the birthday of someone from the family.
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 is because everyone wants something special on their birthday and making
food
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 at home might not give them a special feeling about the party.
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, parents can explain the small childhood disputes that usually rise between the children to bring them back to those days. To illustrate, many children even parents when they were children always had some good memories which make everyone laugh
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 the birthday person.
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, visiting
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 for
food
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 on occasion can make life more fascinating and motivating. In conclusion,
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 making
food
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 at home and sitting with an individual and family create strong bonds and an excellent fitness level, going to
restaurants
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 on special events for enjoying
food
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 with
families
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 is a fabulous approach.
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