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Process diagram of production of tea and making a cup of tea

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Introduction
The picture
illustrate
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illustrates
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 how
tea
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 is
produce
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produced
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, and
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the process
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process
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processed
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 making
tea
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. There are 18 steps which is beginning with
sows
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sow
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tea
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grows
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growing
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 in China and
india
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India
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 and end with enjoying a
cup
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 of
tea
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.
Body paragraph 1
The
tea
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 plant
are grows
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grows
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 mainly in India and china
start
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starting
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 with
sow
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the sow
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 of
tea
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 seeds in the field, once
plants
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the plants
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are grows
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are grown
are growing
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prefect
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perfect
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.
Next
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,Next
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 pick and put in
basket
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a basket
the basket
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 by farmers
than
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then
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 spread it
in
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on
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the
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a
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 clean floor and dry it in sunlight. After that next step, packed
tea
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 in
the
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a
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 box and load
onto
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it onto
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 a lorry which
deliver
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delivers
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tea
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 boxes
into
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to
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supermarket
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the supermarket
a supermarket
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.
Conclusion
On the other hand
Linking Words
,In order to make a
cup
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 of
tea
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, first of
all
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,all
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 buy
the
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a
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 box of
tea
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 and take it home.
Next
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The next
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steps
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step
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 is
filled
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to fill
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 the
kittle
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kettle
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 with water and place it
for
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to
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 boil and unbox
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tea
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the tea
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 pack than place
into
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it into
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 the
cup
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 once
water
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the water
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 boil
pour
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pours
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 it into the
cup
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 and leave for 2 min and add milk and
surger
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surgery
sugar
 as needed.
Linking Words
Finally
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,Finally
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 enjoy a
cup
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 of
tea
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 and relax

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