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Some people think that parents should teach their children about the importance of recycling. Others believe recycling should be taught in schools. Discuss both views and give your opinion

#people #parents #children #importance #schools
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Nowadays, there is much away from the public about
the recycle
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.
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, they admire recycling and
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teach
children
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 the value of our decade.
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, a lot of parents now make it require schools to put it as a subject
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 to the essential subjects.
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, others consider that as the parent's responsibility. In
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 essay, I will argue the two sides of the statement and represent my standpoint.
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, recycling is one of the genius processes in our
life
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 that humans invented.
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, our planet got a lot of benefits from recycling
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 keeping the air more smoothly and increasing the availability of healthier air.
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, we can exploit Western materials from trash and transform them into new useful products. There is a variety of advantages that
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come
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 from recycling associated with the Earth even us. There is no doubt that recycling is a substantial element, that makes us teach it in schools. No matter where you will teach the
children
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 as much matter as to let them know the importance of the concept. To summarize in my view, I prefer that the parents should teach their
children
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 and explain the main point with easy information.
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, the
children
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 will understand the basic idea of recycling.
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, when schools teach it as a serious subject maybe that becomes difficult to be specific
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 if they give them complex information.
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, they will struggle to know what it exactly means. There is a likelihood that, they will feel bored learning that and memorize the subject.
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