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It is important for people to take risks, both in their professional lives and their personal lives. Do you think the advantages of taking risks outweigh the disadvantages?

some
people
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 argue that it is important for
people
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 to take
risks
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 , both in their professional
lives
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 and their personal
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 . I think the disadvantages of taking
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 outweigh the advantages. on the one hand ,taking
risks
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 both in professional and personal
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 will take some advantages. if
people
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 take
risks
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 to
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 some unknown place, and probably the results will promote innovation in the relative place.
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,
people
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 can meet different
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 during
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 in their personal
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 , and
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people
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 can enjoy different views and broaden their eyes .
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 , it may bring some national discoveries and achievements
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 as science ,outer space and humanity which can promote national status .
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, taking
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 both in professional
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 and personal
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 have some benefits, but I think there
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 have many disadvantages.
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, professional
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 will invest huge money in
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 ,and the results of the
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 are unknown,
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 , astronauts take
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 to go to outer space to do some
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, and they need advanced equipment ,so governments should spend huge money on
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 ,thereby ,it will increase the government financial burden, and
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, when spaceman into the space, their safety will face the problem.
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 ,when common
people
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 take
risks
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 if they meet an accident , they will lose their life ,and their relatives will affect ,
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, their
wife
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, husband or children may become depressed ,
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,I think it is no need to take
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 in our daily life because it will make
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 a sense of unhappiness . in conclusion, it is important for
people
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 to take
risks
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 whether ,in their professional
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 or personal
lives
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 ,I think the disadvantages overweight the advantages .

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Opportunities
  • Growth
  • Innovation
  • Challenges
  • Self-discovery
  • Resilience
  • Uncertainty
  • Consequences
  • Calculated risks
  • Stagnation
  • Regret
  • Comfort zone
  • Entrepreneurship
  • Adventurous spirit
  • Thriving
  • Failure
  • Mitigate
  • Reap the rewards
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