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Some people decide to move to another country when they are retire.What are the advantages and disadvantages of this practice.

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Nowadays,
people
 are leaving the
country
 to get a job or for higher studies. Many
people
 after
retirement
 decide to leave the
country
 and settle in another nation and enjoy their retired
life
.
This
 essay shall discuss both contradicting statements in
further
 paragraphs and a conclusion will be drawn later on. To start with, there are myriads of reasons, supporters of view would put
further
, first and foremost is that the older
people
 after
retirement
 just need to enjoy their remaining
life
 with each other and they can leave peacefully in another nation rather than living in their native
country
.
However
, living in other countries retired
people
 can study and live in a different culture from the one they were living in.
For instance
, if
people
 from the USA are retired from their jobs and want to live a
retirement
life
 by exploring new things and by travelling around the world
people
 can just pack their bags and move to the
country
 of their choice.
On the other hand
, there are certain
people
 supporting the latter view, that it will not be beneficial for them to move to another nation after
retirement
; as they will not be able to receive the
retirement
 fund and other schemes allocated to them for living
life
.
For example
, there are ample schemes launched by governments for the betterment of the
people
. Agglomerating all the points, I hereby again favour my opinion that leaving the
country
 after
retirement
 is not a big good decision by
people
.
Hence
, they should be leaving in their own
country
.
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