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Some people decide to move to another country when they are retire.What are the advantages and disadvantages of this practice.

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Nowadays,
people
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 are leaving the
country
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 to get a job or for higher studies. Many
people
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 after
retirement
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 decide to leave the
country
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 and settle in another nation and enjoy their retired
life
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.
This
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 essay shall discuss both contradicting statements in
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 paragraphs and a conclusion will be drawn later on. To start with, there are myriads of reasons, supporters of view would put
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, first and foremost is that the older
people
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 after
retirement
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 just need to enjoy their remaining
life
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 with each other and they can leave peacefully in another nation rather than living in their native
country
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.
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, living in other countries retired
people
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 can study and live in a different culture from the one they were living in.
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, if
people
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 from the USA are retired from their jobs and want to live a
retirement
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life
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 by exploring new things and by travelling around the world
people
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 can just pack their bags and move to the
country
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 of their choice.
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, there are certain
people
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 supporting the latter view, that it will not be beneficial for them to move to another nation after
retirement
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; as they will not be able to receive the
retirement
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 fund and other schemes allocated to them for living
life
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.
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, there are ample schemes launched by governments for the betterment of the
people
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. Agglomerating all the points, I hereby again favour my opinion that leaving the
country
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 after
retirement
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 is not a big good decision by
people
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.
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, they should be leaving in their own
country
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.
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