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Some people today have argued that countries should interfere less in the affairs of other nations. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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People nowadays have been arguing that nations ought to not meddle as much in the internal affairs of other countries. In terms of the agreement, I strongly agree
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 several considerations in which to maintain the relationship between both nations and yet,
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country
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 can interfere with the inner workings of other nations if there is harm to themselves.
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meddling with
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 state beyond the covenant runs the risk of breaking the harmonic relationship. Everyone is conscious that every
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 in the world has its own laws and rules which their government has deemed to be better for citizens.
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, it would be inappropriate for Malaysia to intervene constantly in India if it did to promote the welfare of Indian citizens, as
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 would be a violation of Indian sovereignty.
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, to maintain the two countries' partnership,
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nation
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 should not have a significant role in the domestic affairs of another.
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, if there is a reason which harms their
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, a
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 can interfere heavily in the affairs of other countries.
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 is done in order to defend their own interests, including those of the defence, economy, and currency.
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, China's economy is impacted when the US imposes an energy embargo on Russia.
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, it makes sense for China to interfere because they need to protect their own assets because failing to do so will enable their currency to fluctuate to a narrow range of values.
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,
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 can intervene more freely because it needs to secure its own region.
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, I agree that
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country
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 should interfere less with others to preserve their friendships, which can be used in the future.
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, it is acceptable for
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 to interfere more if there is a threat.
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