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Many students find it difficult to concentrate or pay attention at school. What are the reasons? What could be done to solve this problem?

#students #attention #school
Many
students
faces
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 difficulty in concentrating or paying attention towards school.
Students
 are
future
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the future
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 of our country. India is getting flourished and
developed
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developing
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 each day with the revolutionary steps which
is
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 taking place knowing or unknowingly. Earlier
due to
 less knowledge new technologies and new inventions were not happening but now it is totally
opposite
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. Schools and colleges are
also
 enriching the quality of
the
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education. Earlier the importance
were
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 given only to studies but now all the schools are working on
activity based
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activity-based
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 learning where the
students
 will be learning the concepts through
activities
. Sometimes the daily schedule becomes so hectic for the
students
 that they cannot concentrate on other
activities
. Not only because of
activities
 or busy schedules,
there could
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 be many more reasons
such
 as
language
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 used in the classroom by the teacher, friends bullying the
students
 for no reason, etc and
due to
 these
reasons
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 absenteeism is increasing rapidly. It is
effecting
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affecting
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badly
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them badly
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 on
students
.
Overall
 looking at the issues
if
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we will cut shot the
activities
 and the involvement of multilingual teaching
students
 facing the difficulty can be improved on a very high level.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • concentration
  • attention span
  • distractions
  • technology
  • boredom
  • tiredness
  • engagement
  • learning disabilities
  • teaching techniques
  • classroom size
  • family issues
  • health problems
  • motivational strategies
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