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Nowadays many people choose to be self empoyed, rather than to work for a company or organisation.Why might this be the case?What could be the disadvantages of being self employed?

in recent times many
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 prefer to start their own
job
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instead
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 of working as an employee.
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 essay will explain why
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 issue occurred and what are the disadvantages. In the contemporary era, there are many
people
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 who want to start their own businesses.They don'
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 like jobs at any company.They want to develop their business.
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 issue has many reasons. if you have your own activity you can close it when a problem happens and do other things or solve the problems because you have freedom of action, in spite of governmental
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 that you do have not
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 advantage.,
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 if you are self-employed you can
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 your career when emergency times or you making qualitative and quantitative changes because you have no limits in it ,
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 by changing it you can get out of sensitive situations and
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 progress with a new position.
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 my uncle had a grocery store , after five years he faced with many problems about his
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 because his selling decrease. he decided to
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 it and
change
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 his grocery store to a hairdresser, by
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change
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 he exited an emergency situation and improved. in ,contrast having own career has some disadvantages. lack of
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 security is a problem. An economic crisis is a normal happening that occurs in each country. if you are self-employed you are more in danger of financial loss at it because you haven'
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 any financial sponsor.
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 you may bankrupt and economic destruction.
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 having own work has high costs.you should rent a store and buy facilities and invest or take a loan, so you owe money to many
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 and banks and if you haven'
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 enough income , you cannot pay your debts. so your business destructs in the wake of an economic crisis and your debts.
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 my friend's father took loans from three banks and many
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 because he had decided to start a chemical factory. after two years his factory products didn'
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 find any buyers. unfortunately he bankrupt and now he's in prison.
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 having freedom of action and the ability to
change
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 jobs when emergency times are two reasons for
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 to start their own activity , on the other ,hand lack of
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 security and high cost are two disadvantages of
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Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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