The best way to reduce youth crimes is to educate their parents with parental skills. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In recent
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, it has been noticed that Juvenile crime is increased. Some individuals believe that the best possible path to decrease
this
is to give proper training to their
parents
for parenting. In my opinion,
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parental
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skill
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is the possible solution but
along with
that schools and governments are equally responsible for
this
. First and Foremost,
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generation is spending
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time at
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and
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.
Therefore
, teachers are the biggest role model for their students by teaching them not only rules and
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regulations
towards offences but
also
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and
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criminals
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. Tutors can
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punish
them
while
they make any offences to realize them by attempting
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.
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,
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should include
such
lessons in their study which can help young individuals to understand and set their mentality towards Juvenile
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government
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should declare and announce
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policies in public to take
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against any violence. It is as important as taking quick decisions for critical crime cases.
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place and there are
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of witnesses available for the case so
such
decisions should be quickest and media like radio, television and nowadays
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social media suppose to announce it
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immediately
. Second but not
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least,
parents
are
also
having
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impact on their
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. Since they
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up
parents
are contributing
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role in their children. The way
parents
behave and
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certain situations
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their
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the most. By observing
such
elements they learn by
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themselves
.
For instance
, If fathers
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giving respect to all
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women
women's
and helping elders, their children will learn it automatically.
Hence
, it is necessary to learn parental skills as early as possible
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and
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as they are not aware to treat their child and how to behave in front of their kids. To
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conclude
it, I strongly believe that together schools, government and
parents
can reduce youth crime as all are having their own importance and playing
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role in
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generation.
Thus
, only educating
parents
will not give
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.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • mandatory
  • equip
  • psychological
  • constructively
  • foster
  • empowered
  • isolated
  • escalation
  • multi-faceted approach
  • eradicate
  • peer influence
  • socio-economic status
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