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Some people enjoy change, and they look forward to new experiences. Others like their lives to stay the same, and they do not change their usual habits. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Individuals always try to do something new in their
life
,which gives them pleasure and a twist in
life
 ,
meanwhile
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 others don't like changes in their daily
life
.In my opinion,
people
 should discover new things about
life
 and that will help them to be optimistic and enthusiastic. First and foremost,by doing alternative works rather than the same ,
people
 find optimism and success in their
life
.To be precise,if we do various things in our
life
 we will never fill board because it's human nature.
For instance
, a person works for a company for more than twenty years but never attempts for his company.
This
 is because they are not able to think outside the box.
Moreover
, those who
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 doing various work will accumulate experiences from everywhere ,which assists them to find a better way for their
life
 .,Eventually they get successful,to illustrate
this
,Elon musk who is the founder of Tesla always tries something new with his company that helps him to build an empire .
However
, a few peoples prefer to do the exact thing for their whole
life
.
Therefore
,they think there is no risk in
life
 .
For example
, government employees never left their work because they think it's the safest way to live.But they are not able to enjoy their
life
 .
This
 is why I believe that doing various work is better
instead
 of one.Lots of
people
 are doing part-time jobs which give them plenty of knowledge and experience.They can apply those experiences and do something good with their
life
. In conclusion,changes in
life
 always help
people
 to stay happy and optimistic because without new things our
life
 would be boring.
Although
,some
people
 don't want changes because they want to out of risk.
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Topic Vocabulary:
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  • enrich
  • adaptation
  • global world
  • inner development
  • stagnation
  • conversely
  • comfort
  • uncertainty
  • traditions
  • predictability
  • balance
  • maintaining
  • sacrificing
  • personal growth
  • consistency
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