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some people say that to get success university education is must but others don't believe so. discuss both views and give your opinion?

#people #success #university #education
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Few Individuals believe a
degree
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 is a key to success but some are thinking a
university
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education
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 is not required to achieve a goal in life. In
this
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 essay, I am going to discuss both points and
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 with my opinion.
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 who are focusing on
education
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 believe that a
University
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education
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 is the first step to achieving their goal. Some people plan their future to do Jobs in International Companies like Microsoft, Google, Apple, Tesla etc. to get a position in any of these reputed companies the basic requirement is a bachelor's
degree
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 which is mandatory. And others who don’t want to do a Job but need to develop skills and invent something new like Touch screens, Internet browsing, Operating Systems, Artificial Intelligence etc. need a
university
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education
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.
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, who believe to get successful in life,
education
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 is not mandatory. these people have a target to become famous in their life, their goals are to become Film Start, Sportsmen, or Businessman which is not required a
university
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degree
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 to achieve what they plan. If someone has interested to become a professional football player, he has to focus on sports
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 of a
university
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degree
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 or someone planning to become a Film star has to focus on acting not a
university
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education
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.
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, I opine
University
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education
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 is a must for everyone but I don’t believe it is the key to success. We have to pursue a
university
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degree
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 to educate our-self and guide the coming generation, success comes with interest and focus. If we don’t support
education
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 will not develop our nation and invent new things in future.
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