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many people prefer to work in the same field for their whole life while some prefer to change the field of work. discuss both the views and give your opinion.

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In our modern society, people have the possibility to choose a wide variety of jobs. Some like working in the same field for their entire
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 others usually enjoy starting new work experience and changing the type of jobs. For the first category of people, remaining in the same sector represent a good choice because they have the impression to live in a safer way. In fact, without the danger and the stress of changing, they usually are more concentrated on their routine and on improving their
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, after a long period in the same work, they could not be very motivated and
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 may lead them to a boring
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 situation like many scientific findings have proved, stress and sadness increase dramatically.  In the second type of population, the first changing of job could be characterised by many difficulties, but in the long term, they would have more benefits than staying in the same workshop in all aspects of their
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-changing is always the origin of new motivation and energy in order to live in a better way. As in the USA where changing a job is more common than in Europe,
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 Americans are able to give better in their activities. To end, in my view a better way of living does not exist between the two opposite opinions that
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 illustrate, but it depends on the situation. It's clear that starting a new work can give motivation and energy when a person is bored by the daily routine,
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 choice would be not made when it is a source of a huge sense of stress
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